This is my tētahi beach draft 1. I attempted to add similes, metaphors and onomatopoeia.
This is the link to my planning of
Today we went to tētahi. It was as cold as the winter breeze but I still went into the water to do some
swimming. You can see the driftwood on the beach from the storm from last night. Then it got colder
and colder so I went back up onto the sand to make a sandcastle. The clouds are as dark as the
night sky. The wind was howling like a wolf and the sandcastle is finished. The wind was as cold as
Antarctica but decided not to go home. I could hear the debris screaming as it went across the sand
for the high winds. The sea gulls are as loud as a zoo but it got too cold so I went home.
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